mirror+writing

Mirror writing draft 2 The girl looking back at me seems familiar. Her eyes are a greenish, yellowy colour. She has a green ring around the outside of her eyes, as dark as the forest and she has yellow on the inside of the ring. Her hair is brown with blonde on top. It's a kind of a sandy blonde, she always has her hair tided up in a pony tail and she has fuzzy bits always sticking up. It makes her look like she has cat whiskers. Her face is scattered with freckles from being in the sun too long at the beach.

This familiar girl was born in 1997 in the Waikato hospital and has had great and some not so great experiences in life. She remembers well the time when she was little and she went to water world on a class trip. Her friend Bailey accidentally hit her mouth with a __fluder__ board and her front tooth fell out - OUCH. Luckily she caught it before it fell in the pool. She didn’t really like the taste of blood for the rest of the day, but she forgot about it when she was hanging out with her friends.

She doesn’t __no__ what she wants to be when she's older, but if anything her hopes would be to be an actress. Her favourite subjects in school would be Reading and Art. She would like to do drama, she thinks she would enjoy it. She has lots of friends and gets along well with all of them.

By Emma =] Miss Crawford - I love the similes you used in your first paragraph - especially the one about your eyes being like the forest! There are a few spelling errors, I have underlined those. I wonder if you could add some more descriptive langaue to your second paragraph? Could you describe the pool?